GRAMMAR PRACTICE, SENTENCES: Comma Splices and Fused Sentences I, paragraph editing

Question 1

The paragraph contains several comma splices and fused sentences. Decide if the underlined selection needs to be revised or if it is correct as is

While most visitors to Washington, D.C., visit the well-known memorials, including the Washington Monument, the Lincoln and Jefferson memorials, and the more recent Vietnam Memorial Wall, a beautiful and lesser-known memorial is an environmental park that occupies 7.5 acres, it is the Franklin Delano Roosevelt Memorial. In 1974, Lawrence Halprin was commissioned to design the memorial, he is a respected environmental designer who has worked on restoration projects and designs in San Francisco, Seattle, and even Jerusalem. The FDR Memorial has four outdoor galleries, or rooms, that represent his four terms of office, with trees, waterfalls, sculptures, and pools defining the spaces. The first room represents FDR’s first term in the midst of the Great Depression, the second room represents his leadership of hope through his fireside chats, the third room represents the difficulties and uncertainties of war, the fourth room represents a brief moment of peace before his death in office. Although Roosevelt himself disliked being seen in his wheelchair, one of the sculptures represents him in his chair. He was a chain smoker who was often seen with his cigarette holder in hand, none of the sculptures include his cigarette. However, he would have probably appreciated the sculpture with his beloved dog, Fala.

 

Which option below would be an acceptable revision of the underlined selection?

 

Vietnam Memorial Wall: a beautiful and lesser-known memorial

Vietnam Memorial Wall; a beautiful and lesser-known memorial

Vietnam Memorial Wall a beautiful and lesser-known memorial

No revision is necessary.

 

Question 2

 

The paragraph contains several comma splices and fused sentences. Decide if the underlined selection needs to be revised or if it is correct as is.

 

While most visitors to Washington, D.C., visit the well-known memorials, including the Washington Monument, the Lincoln and Jefferson memorials, and the more recent Vietnam Memorial Wall, a beautiful and lesser-known memorial is an environmental park that occupies 7.5 acres, it is the Franklin Delano Roosevelt Memorial. In 1974, Lawrence Halprin was commissioned to design the memorial, he is a respected environmental designer who has worked on restoration projects and designs in San Francisco, Seattle, and even Jerusalem. The FDR Memorial has four outdoor galleries, or rooms, that represent his four terms of office, with trees, waterfalls, sculptures, and pools defining the spaces. The first room represents FDR’s first term in the midst of the Great Depression, the second room represents his leadership of hope through his fireside chats, the third room represents the difficulties and uncertainties of war, the fourth room represents a brief moment of peace before his death in office. Although Roosevelt himself disliked being seen in his wheelchair, one of the sculptures represents him in his chair. He was a chain smoker who was often seen with his cigarette holder in hand, none of the sculptures include his cigarette. However, he would have probably appreciated the sculpture with his beloved dog, Fala.

 

Which option below would be an acceptable revision of the underlined selection?

 

holder in hand none of the sculptures

holder in hand, but none of the sculptures

holder in hand because none of the sculptures

No revision is necessary.

 

 

 

Question 3

 

The paragraph contains several comma splices and fused sentences. Decide if the underlined selection needs to be revised or if it is correct as is.

 

While most visitors to Washington, D.C., visit the well-known memorials, including the Washington Monument, the Lincoln and Jefferson memorials, and the more recent Vietnam Memorial Wall, a beautiful and lesser-known memorial is an environmental park that occupies 7.5 acres, it is the Franklin Delano Roosevelt Memorial. In 1974, Lawrence Halprin was commissioned to design the memorial, he is a respected environmental designer who has worked on restoration projects and designs in San Francisco, Seattle, and even Jerusalem. The FDR Memorial has four outdoor galleries, or rooms, that represent his four terms of office, with trees, waterfalls, sculptures, and pools defining the spaces. The first room represents FDR’s first term in the midst of the Great Depression, the second room represents his leadership of hope through his fireside chats, the third room represents the difficulties and uncertainties of war, the fourth room represents a brief moment of peace before his death in office. Although Roosevelt himself disliked being seen in his wheelchair, one of the sculptures represents him in his chair. He was a chain smoker who was often seen with his cigarette holder in hand, none of the sculptures include his cigarette. However, he would have probably appreciated the sculpture with his beloved dog, Fala.

 

Which option below would be an acceptable revision of the underlined selection?

 

environmental park that occupies 7.5 acres. It is the Franklin Delano Roosevelt Memorial.

environmental park, that occupies 7.5 acres, it is the Franklin Delano Roosevelt Memorial.

environmental park that occupies 7.5 acres it is the Franklin Delano Roosevelt Memorial.

No revision is necessary.

 

Question 4

 

The paragraph contains several comma splices and fused sentences. Decide if the underlined selection needs to be revised or if it is correct as is.

 

While most visitors to Washington, D.C., visit the well-known memorials, including the Washington Monument, the Lincoln and Jefferson memorials, and the more recent Vietnam Memorial Wall, a beautiful and lesser-known memorial is an environmental park that occupies 7.5 acres, it is the Franklin Delano Roosevelt Memorial. In 1974, Lawrence Halprin was commissioned to design the memorial, he is a respected environmental designer who has worked on restoration projects and designs in San Francisco, Seattle, and even Jerusalem. The FDR Memorial has four outdoor galleries, or rooms, that represent his four terms of office, with trees, waterfalls, sculptures, and pools defining the spaces. The first room represents FDR’s first term in the midst of the Great Depression, the second room represents his leadership of hope through his fireside chats, the third room represents the difficulties and uncertainties of war, the fourth room represents a brief moment of peace before his death in office. Although Roosevelt himself disliked being seen in his wheelchair, one of the sculptures represents him in his chair. He was a chain smoker who was often seen with his cigarette holder in hand, none of the sculptures include his cigarette. However, he would have probably appreciated the sculpture with his beloved dog, Fala.

 

Which option(s) below would be an acceptable revision of the underlined selection?

 

commissioned to design the memorial. He is a

commissioned to design the memorial; he is a

Both revisions are acceptable.

No revision is necessary.

 

Question 5

 

The paragraph contains several comma splices and fused sentences. Decide if the underlined selection needs to be revised or if it is correct as is.

 

While most visitors to Washington, D.C., visit the well-known memorials, including the Washington Monument, the Lincoln and Jefferson memorials, and the more recent Vietnam Memorial Wall, a beautiful and lesser-known memorial is an environmental park that occupies 7.5 acres, it is the Franklin Delano Roosevelt Memorial. In 1974, Lawrence Halprin was commissioned to design the memorial, he is a respected environmental designer who has worked on restoration projects and designs in San Francisco, Seattle, and even Jerusalem. The FDR Memorial has four outdoor galleries, or rooms, that represent his four terms of office, with trees, waterfalls, sculptures, and pools defining the spaces. The first room represents FDR’s first term in the midst of the Great Depression, the second room represents his leadership of hope through his fireside chats, the third room represents the difficulties and uncertainties of war, the fourth room represents a brief moment of peace before his death in office. Although Roosevelt himself disliked being seen in his wheelchair, one of the sculptures represents him in his chair. He was a chain smoker who was often seen with his cigarette holder in hand, none of the sculptures include his cigarette. However, he would have probably appreciated the sculpture with his beloved dog, Fala.

 

Which option(s) below would be an acceptable revision of the underlined selection?

 

respected environmental designer; who has worked

respected environmental designer: who has worked

Both revisions are acceptable.

No revision is necessary.

 

Question 6

 

The paragraph contains several comma splices and fused sentences. Decide if the underlined selection needs to be revised or if it is correct as is.

 

While most visitors to Washington, D.C., visit the well-known memorials, including the Washington Monument, the Lincoln and Jefferson memorials, and the more recent Vietnam Memorial Wall, a beautiful and lesser-known memorial is an environmental park that occupies 7.5 acres, it is the Franklin Delano Roosevelt Memorial. In 1974, Lawrence Halprin was commissioned to design the memorial, he is a respected environmental designer who has worked on restoration projects and designs in San Francisco, Seattle, and even Jerusalem. The FDR Memorial has four outdoor galleries, or rooms, that represent his four terms of office, with trees, waterfalls, sculptures, and pools defining the spaces. The first room represents FDR’s first term in the midst of the Great Depression, the second room represents his leadership of hope through his fireside chats, the third room represents the difficulties and uncertainties of war, the fourth room represents a brief moment of peace before his death in office. Although Roosevelt himself disliked being seen in his wheelchair, one of the sculptures represents him in his chair. He was a chain smoker who was often seen with his cigarette holder in hand, none of the sculptures include his cigarette. However, he would have probably appreciated the sculpture with his beloved dog, Fala.

 

Which option below would be an acceptable revision of the underlined selection?

 

his four terms of office: with trees

his four terms of office with trees

his four terms of office. With trees

No revision is necessary.

 

Question 7

 

The paragraph contains several comma splices and fused sentences. Decide if the underlined selection needs to be revised or if it is correct as is.

 

While most visitors to Washington, D.C., visit the well-known memorials, including the Washington Monument, the Lincoln and Jefferson memorials, and the more recent Vietnam Memorial Wall, a beautiful and lesser-known memorial is an environmental park that occupies 7.5 acres, it is the Franklin Delano Roosevelt Memorial. In 1974, Lawrence Halprin was commissioned to design the memorial, he is a respected environmental designer who has worked on restoration projects and designs in San Francisco, Seattle, and even Jerusalem. The FDR Memorial has four outdoor galleries, or rooms, that represent his four terms of office, with trees, waterfalls, sculptures, and pools defining the spaces. The first room represents FDR’s first term in the midst of the Great Depression, the second room represents his leadership of hope through his fireside chats, the third room represents the difficulties and uncertainties of war, the fourth room represents a brief moment of peace before his death in office. Although Roosevelt himself disliked being seen in his wheelchair, one of the sculptures represents him in his chair. He was a chain smoker who was often seen with his cigarette holder in hand, none of the sculptures include his cigarette. However, he would have probably appreciated the sculpture with his beloved dog, Fala.

 

Which option(s) below would be an acceptable revision of the underlined selection?

 

Great Depression; the second room

Great Depression, while the second room

Both revisions are acceptable.

No revision is necessary.

 

Question 8

 

The paragraph contains several comma splices and fused sentences. Decide if the underlined selection needs to be revised or if it is correct as is.

 

While most visitors to Washington, D.C., visit the well-known memorials, including the Washington Monument, the Lincoln and Jefferson memorials, and the more recent Vietnam Memorial Wall, a beautiful and lesser-known memorial is an environmental park that occupies 7.5 acres, it is the Franklin Delano Roosevelt Memorial. In 1974, Lawrence Halprin was commissioned to design the memorial, he is a respected environmental designer who has worked on restoration projects and designs in San Francisco, Seattle, and even Jerusalem. The FDR Memorial has four outdoor galleries, or rooms, that represent his four terms of office, with trees, waterfalls, sculptures, and pools defining the spaces. The first room represents FDR’s first term in the midst of the Great Depression, the second room represents his leadership of hope through his fireside chats, the third room represents the difficulties and uncertainties of war, the fourth room represents a brief moment of peace before his death in office. Although Roosevelt himself disliked being seen in his wheelchair, one of the sculptures represents him in his chair. He was a chain smoker who was often seen with his cigarette holder in hand, none of the sculptures include his cigarette. However, he would have probably appreciated the sculpture with his beloved dog, Fala.

 

Which option(s) below would be an acceptable revision of the underlined selection?

 

fireside chats, and the third room

fireside chats the third room

fireside chats; the third room

All are acceptable revisions.

 

Question 9

 

The paragraph contains several comma splices and fused sentences. Decide if the underlined selection needs to be revised or if it is correct as is.

 

While most visitors to Washington, D.C., visit the well-known memorials, including the Washington Monument, the Lincoln and Jefferson memorials, and the more recent Vietnam Memorial Wall, a beautiful and lesser-known memorial is an environmental park that occupies 7.5 acres, it is the Franklin Delano Roosevelt Memorial. In 1974, Lawrence Halprin was commissioned to design the memorial, he is a respected environmental designer who has worked on restoration projects and designs in San Francisco, Seattle, and even Jerusalem. The FDR Memorial has four outdoor galleries, or rooms, that represent his four terms of office, with trees, waterfalls, sculptures, and pools defining the spaces. The first room represents FDR’s first term in the midst of the Great Depression, the second room represents his leadership of hope through his fireside chats, the third room represents the difficulties and uncertainties of war, the fourth room represents a brief moment of peace before his death in office. Although Roosevelt himself disliked being seen in his wheelchair, one of the sculptures represents him in his chair. He was a chain smoker who was often seen with his cigarette holder in hand, none of the sculptures include his cigarette. However, he would have probably appreciated the sculpture with his beloved dog, Fala.

 

Which option(s) below would be an acceptable revision of the underlined selection?

 

uncertainties of war and the fourth

uncertainties of war; the fourth

Both revisions are acceptable.

No revision is necessary.

 

Question 10

 

The paragraph contains several comma splices and fused sentences. Decide if the underlined selection needs to be revised or if it is correct as is.

 

While most visitors to Washington, D.C., visit the well-known memorials, including the Washington Monument, the Lincoln and Jefferson memorials, and the more recent Vietnam Memorial Wall, a beautiful and lesser-known memorial is an environmental park that occupies 7.5 acres, it is the Franklin Delano Roosevelt Memorial. In 1974, Lawrence Halprin was commissioned to design the memorial, he is a respected environmental designer who has worked on restoration projects and designs in San Francisco, Seattle, and even Jerusalem. The FDR Memorial has four outdoor galleries, or rooms, that represent his four terms of office, with trees, waterfalls, sculptures, and pools defining the spaces. The first room represents FDR’s first term in the midst of the Great Depression, the second room represents his leadership of hope through his fireside chats, the third room represents the difficulties and uncertainties of war, the fourth room represents a brief moment of peace before his death in office. Although Roosevelt himself disliked being seen in his wheelchair, one of the sculptures represents him in his chair. He was a chain smoker who was often seen with his cigarette holder in hand, none of the sculptures include his cigarette. However, he would have probably appreciated the sculpture with his beloved dog, Fala.

 

Which option below would be an acceptable revision of the underlined selection?

in his wheelchair; one of the sculptures

in his wheelchair. One of the sculptures

in his wheelchair: one of the sculptures

No revision is necessary.

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